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The Hunter or the Game?

by ~SketchedExistence

Critique by ~Strange-1 Mar 16, 2012, 2:22:52 PM

I think the very first panel is the most effective. It's recognizable as the character and the colors and lines work really well. The largest panel seems like it needs more work. It looks slightly unfinished in the faces. I like that the last panel is sort of open ended and the viewer has to interpret what happened.

I feel the text should have been rotated instead of stacked. It looks nicer and is more easily readable if the words are rotated completely instead of stacking the letters. (For example, I mean like this: [link] ).

The idea is definitely strong. Well done!

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~SketchedExistence Mar 16, 2012 Student General Artist

Thank you for the wonderful critique!

I'm glad the first panel turned out well. It's my favorite section of the piece. As for the middle panel... :iconfacepalmpz:. I fought and fought with that section, particularly the shapeshifter character behind Dean. I finally had to just push the paper away.

I was hoping the face in the foreground didn't look unfinished. Dang! XD

Oh, I didn't even think of that! I'll have to remember that. I'm not sure if I'll go back into this one and change the text up, but I'm wanting to storyboard the story I'm working on and get the drawings/text into a panel layout. I'll definitely playy around with rotating the text, to see what all works.

Thanks for the tips and for the great feedback! It's much appreciated.

I ended up learning a lot with this one.

~Strange-1 Mar 16, 2012 Professional General Artist

I feel like I give you a lot of critiques. haha. I think it's because I like that you're so open to them and you seem like you actually appreciate the help.

I do think the face in the foreground is the best out of the three in that panel. I think it's something about the eyes that get me on that one, and then the others maybe it's just because they are smaller so there's less detail.

Yeah it's just something to think about for future works.

You're welcome!

~SketchedExistence Mar 16, 2012 Student General Artist

I always appreciate your critiques.

Help is always good! I've improved a lot over the years due to it. Hopefuly, I can keep up the trend.

Ah, I see what you mean. I'll have to see if I can tweak those eyes at all. I know I wanted the rear one to blend in with the darkness. The dude in the middle was just rough as all get out. He was my major problem in the piece. -.-' I need to remember to stop trying to draw faces at such weird angles. The 3/4 one drives me crazy, and yet I try anyways.